OET Letter Correction – Mr Ducie Wood – Grade C+

OET LETTER CORRECTION

Mr Ducie Wood – Grade C+

When writing your letter, you should do it under the same circumstances of the exam day. Therefore, we suggest you write your letter within the required time. Then retype it into the word document and send that to us.

Letter correction

Dr Vincent Raymond

422 Wickham Tce

Brisbane 400

08/08/2009,

Dear Dr Raymond ,

Re: Mr Ducie Wood,DOB: 15/07/1943.

As arranged with your receptionist, I am referring Mr Wood who presented with signs and symptoms suggestive of atrial flutter .I would be grateful If you could manage his condition as you think appropriate .

Mr Wood is a widowed man .His past medical history is unremarkable, It is worth mentioning that his mother died of acute myocardial infarction.Kindly note ,that he drinks alcohol rarely .

• It is worth mentioning (you should have started a new sentence)
• Kindly note that (no need for a comma)
• Your sentences are too simple. It is better to use a parallel or a complex sentence structure for a better coherence. (Mr wood is a widowed man whose past medical history is unremarkable and who drinks alcohol. It is worth mentioning that his mother died of acute myocardial infarction.)

Initially he presented to us on 03/07/2009 for a regular check up ,he stated that he has been experiencing a chest discomfort and a fluttery sensation .Accordingly,his physical examination and ECG were performed which revealed unremarkable ; therefore,medication was prescribed and recommendation regarding symptoms recording has been advised. Two weeks later , the patient came with a persistence of symptoms despite a decrease of frequency compaired  with the previous days.based on that his medication has been adjusted .

• Using a conjunction is more accurate than using a comma. (check up and he ….)
• Compared (spelling mistake)

Upon today’s review, the patient looks anxious and upset as he is concerned about worsening of his symptoms ; furthermore, he requests a cardiology opinion.

Based on the above the patient needs a comprehensive assessment and evaluation,Your special concern regarding his management is immensely appreciated .

• You should have started a new sentence

Should you need any further clarification,I will be delighted to hear from you .

Yours Sincerely,

Doctor.

Personalised tips for your next letter

To improve your score, you need to:

• You need to use a better structure by binding sentences together with linking words and punctuation
• Use a better variety of tenses to enhance your grammar score
• Make sure your punctuation is correct and accurate
• Revise to avoid spelling and simple mistakes

Any estimated grade score is based on the information you have provided to us, however your score will always vary depending on the task and the circumstances at the time of writing.

ESTIMATED GRADE: C+

Comments on scores

Overall Task Fulfilment – 4

You have shown the ability to manage the task and organise the information in a logical way., but there are some mistakes in information order. Significant grammar errors and inaccuracies have a negative effect on the target reader in places. You are clearly familiar with the style of the letter but simply don’t have sufficient control of the language required.

Appropriateness of Language – 4

You have chosen  vocabulary and tone which are generally appropriate for the target reader and the communicative task . A few inaccuracies do not impede communication. As a whole, the letter is not well organised.

Comprehension of Stimulus – 4

You demonstrate an understanding of the task and input which is generally accurate. Many of the main points are explained clearly and given an appropriate degree of prominence. You should determine relevant, semi relevant and irrelevant information. Select the important ones

Control of Linguistic Features (Grammar and Cohesion) – 4

You have used a range of devices to connect information, there are some errors regarding tenses, articles and the passive voice.

Control of Presentation Features (Spelling, Punctuation and Layout) – 4

You have chosen a good layout, but there are some punctuation errors and word formation mistakes

Sample answers

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Medicine: https://oetspeaking.com/oetwriting/oet-letter-writing/medicine/

Additional material

To help you improve further we are happy to provide two links to information that will ensure you are more aware of the OET letter writing task.

You will find an OET Writing Guide at this link: https://oetspeaking.com/oetwriting/wp-content/uploads/2018/06/OET_Writing_Guide.pdf

As well as OET Letter Writing General Tips at this link: https://oetspeaking.com/oetwriting/wp-content/uploads/2018/06/OET-Letter-General-Tips.pdf

Any questions

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You will find a great selection of sample answer on the official OET website. I do suggest browsing there.

Sending letters

Sending Letters: We welcome all OET letters for correction to be sent by e-mail to a specially designated e-mail address at [email protected].

We do need to stress that you have to include some important information within the email, these are: Order ID, Letter Number, Service Type and Your Name.

Here’s an example:

78901, 2, Standard, Mohamed Youssef.

It is that simple!

Under the new system, you will receive a generic auto-reply within a few minutes of your e-mail being received.

Please feel free to send your letters one by one or all at the same time, the decision is yours.

Failure to send your letter with the above information in the email

will result in your letter not being processed for correction.

Grammar lesson

Compound sentences and Coordinating Conjunctions

When writing referral letters it is necessary to take information from the case notes and write it in complete sentences. The most basic way to do this is as a simple sentence. Simple sentences commonly contain a subject, verb and object and are known as independent clauses.

Example: The patient is allergic to penicillin.

This method is suitable for information which is not connected to other information in the case notes. However, it is more common to group information which is related into compound sentences. In the sentence below, two ideas are joined by the conjunction and. Note that the subject for each clause is different and each clause can function as a complete sentence

Example: ­I prescribed Panadol for his hand pain and he was advised to reduce weight and do exercise.

Compound sentences are joined by conjunctions and they show the relationship between the ideas. The most common conjunctions are:

and = the second clause contains a similar idea as the first

Example: She does not smoke and (she)drinks alcohol rarely.
but = the second clause contains an contrasting idea

Example: She does not smoke but (she) is a heavy alcohol drinker.

so=the second clause expresses a result or outcome

Example: She does not smoke or drink alcohol so her health is good.

One important decision for the writer to make is whether to include a subject in the second clause. Basically, the rule is you need to add a subject after a conjunction if the subject of the second clause is different to that of the first clause. Or if the sentence is very long.

I prescribed Panadol for his hand pain and he was advised to reduce weight and do exercise. (In this case you must add a subject after and as the subject is different in the second clause)

­I prescribed Panadol for his hand pain and advised for weight reduction and exercise. (in this case you can omit the subject I as it is the same as the subject for the first part of the sentence)

­I prescribed Panadol for his hand pain and I advised for weight reduction and exercise. (this is grammatically correct, but in terms of style not very good as it is clear the subject remains the same, so need to repeat it)

Common Mistakes

Example Cohesive Paragraph

Doctors

Initially, I saw Mr. Jones last month when he came for check-up. At this time, his blood pressure showed a mild elevation (165/90)and his weight was above the normal limit (85 kg while his height is 173 cm); however, the cardiovascular examination and the urinalysis were normal. Therefore, I advised him to lose weight, to stop smoking cigarettes and to come for a review visit within one month. A prostate specific antigen test was requested to be done before the next visit.