OET LETTER CORRECTION
Mrs Priya Sharma – Grade C+
When writing your letter, you should do it under the same circumstances of the exam day. Therefore, we suggest you write your letter within the required time. Then retype it into the word document and send that to us.
Dr Lisa Smith
Dear Dr Smith,
Re: Mrs Priya Sharma, DOB: 08/05/1953.
Thank you for seeing Mrs sharma,who presented with an uncontrolled diabetes mellitus.I would be grateful if you could manage her condition as you think appropriate.
Mrs sharma is a married woman .In terms of her past medical history ,she is a known case of diabetis mellitus since 1994 for which she has managed accordingly. Kindly note,that her current medication are metformin and glipizide tabs.
- Diabetes (spelling mistake)
- Note that (no need for a comma)
- Capitalize the market name of medicines
On 29/12/2013, the patient visited us as she has been very concerned about her high blood sugar readings despite following a good appetite.Accordingly ,the blood tests was requested and the physical examination was performed which revealed unremarkable apart from a high blood pressure reading ;therefore, candesartan tab was prescribed and an appointment has been scheduled after two weeks for follow up.
- Were prescribed (based on tests)
Six days later,the patient came to review the blood results .Regrettably,it showed a high Hba1c reading along with derangement of the lipid profile; therefore, adjustment of his medication and addition of atorvastatin tab have been concluded.
On the subsequent visits, the patient claimed that his blood sugar as well as blood pressure readings were within normal; However , his fasting blood sugar reading is in higher side upon today’s review.
- Capitalize the market names of medicines
- No need to capitalize “however”
Based on the above , the patient requires an endocrinologist assessment .Your special concern regarding her management is Immensely appreciated.
Should you need any queries,I will be delighted to hear from you
Personalised tips for your next letter
To improve your score, you need to:
- Your letter is well organized, but you need to revise to avoid simple mistakes
- Make sure you use a better variety of tenses for a better score
- Check your punctuation
- Make sure your capitalization is used correctly
- Use more parallel structures for a better coherence and a better sentence structure
Any estimated grade score is based on the information you have provided to us, however your score will always vary depending on the task and the circumstances at the time of writing.
ESTIMATED GRADE: C+
Comments on scores
Overall Task Fulfilment – 4
You have shown the ability to manage the task and organise the information in a logical way., but there are some mistakes in information order. Significant grammar errors and inaccuracies have a negative effect on the target reader in places. You are clearly familiar with the style of the letter but simply don’t have sufficient control of the language required.
Appropriateness of Language – 4
You have chosen vocabulary and tone which are generally appropriate for the target reader and the communicative task . A few inaccuracies do not impede communication. As a whole, the letter is not well organised.
Comprehension of Stimulus – 4
You demonstrate an understanding of the task and input which is generally accurate. Many of the main points are explained clearly and given an appropriate degree of prominence. You should determine relevant, semi relevant and irrelevant information. Select the important ones
Control of Linguistic Features (Grammar and Cohesion) – 4
You have used a range of devices to connect information, there are some errors regarding tenses, articles and the passive voice.
Control of Presentation Features (Spelling, Punctuation and Layout) – 4
You have chosen a good layout, but there are some punctuation errors and word formation mistakes
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You will find a great selection of sample answer on the official OET website. I do suggest browsing there.
Sending Letters: We welcome all OET letters for correction to be sent by e-mail to a specially designated e-mail address at [email protected].
We do need to stress that you have to include some important information within the email, these are: Order ID, Letter Number, Service Type and Your Name.
Here’s an example:
78901, 2, Standard, Mohamed Youssef.
It is that simple!
Under the new system, you will receive a generic auto-reply within a few minutes of your e-mail being received.
Please feel free to send your letters one by one or all at the same time, the decision is yours.
Failure to send your letter with the above information in the email
will result in your letter not being processed for correction.
Correct use of capitals is an important area to master when writing referral letters. Study the rules of usage below to ensure you meet the standard conventions.
Rules of Usage
- Medications and Diseases
- Capitals are required for proper nouns. Proper nouns include the brand name of a drug or registered trademark of the manufacturer.
- The chemical constituent should be written in lower case.
- Names of diseases should always be lower case.
- bowel cancer
- high blood pressure
- Eponyms: Some medical conditions are named after the person who discovered it. In this case the first word should be capitalised.
- Parkinson’s disease
- Bell’s palsy
- Names of medical equipment do not require capitals.
- Body parts should always be lower case
- adrenal gland
- Proper Nouns: Proper nouns name something specific as in the examples below. These words must always be capitalised.
- Job titles
- The Lactation Consultant, Mater Hospital
- The Veterinary Eye Specialist, University of Queensland
- Mary Jones was admitted to Spirit Hospital.
- Dr. Bloomfield works at Weller Point Medical Centre.
- Places including addresses
- 168 Wickham Terrace, Spring Hill
- 12 Logan Road, Mt Gravatt
- 36 Barmore Street, Holland Park
- Titles when they precede the name of a person
- The patient was seen by Doctor Smith.
- Nurse Jones is in charge of the patient’s care.
- Common Nouns: Common nouns do not name any specific institution, place, person or profession. These words do not need to be capitalised.
- The patient was admitted to hospital.
- The patient does not have a family doctor.
- Steve is a teacher.
- Yoshiro is a doctor.
- Reza is a dentist.
- Holidays, months, days of the week all need to be capitalised. However seasons do not.
- The baby was born on Christmas Day.
- The patient was admitted to hospital on January 12.
- Please come and see me on Wednesday.
- The vaccination will be available in spring.
- The pronoun “I” must always be capitalised.
- It was I who treated the patient.
- Capitalise the first word of a salutation and the first word of a complimentary close.
- Dear Dr. Jameson:
- Yours sincerely,
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